(work in progress op and title) [interest check]

[ElizaThePsycho (Willow)]

hmmmm
i kinda like it
i still probably can’t Commit to anything but i like the idea

[Amelia]

@Atlas

The “Work” phase takes place inside [stupid name], composing of figuring out what makes an anomaly tick, and other miscellaneous work activities. Upon identifying each part of the anomaly, you will be judged and given a grade. The higher the grade, the more money you make from that procedure. You need money to survive during the home phase, as you need to purchase items to keep yourself healthy and pay rent.

Everywhere I look all i see is lobotomy corp

[YoubutWorse]

this sounds kinda interesting? Id probably try it out

on first read i thought this was just an rp where you go to work and go home and i was so here for it lmao

[YoubutWorse]

this is giving real boss baby vibes

[Atlas]

yeah that’s cool and all but you just compared me to boss baby and i’m not sure i can really have that toxic presence in my games

[YoubutWorse]

I compared u to the boss baby guy. Completely different

[YoubutWorse]

[Atlas]

interested parties:
squirrel
ash

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ybw

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may

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willow

[ElizaThePsycho (Willow)]

add me (even though i probably can’t commit it’d be fun)

[Atlas]

does anyone have any suggestions for. anything really.
i may or may not take them

[Ash]

I mean, I feel like this is more a concept than an actual design that can be critiqued.
It’s an interesting setup, but it’s hard to give suggestions given how little there is.

[Atlas]

things to add to op

-example character
-better descriptions
-…a name, preferably.
-finish up the statline
-explain the work side more
-better worldbuilding (and make it less crippingly generic)
-inv slots

[Atlas]

bleh
i’ve never done good worldbuilding
how the heck do people worldbuild

[Ash]

Start from a concept and work backwards.
What does this corporation hope to extract from this site?
Why does this site have that stuff?
Why are they paying us to live here and work rather than just hiring a bunch of contractors?

[Atlas]

@Ash

Start from a concept and work backwards.
What does this corporation hope to extract from this site?
Why does this site have that stuff?

i know the answer to all these things

it just doesn’t help

[Atlas]

also

@Atlas

Hello, and welcome to your orientation! Here at Lurenberg housing, we’re here to happily announce that you are the proud new owner of a lease agreement of a house and the land surrounding! Although we know the area is expensive , we’re sure you’ll be able to manage! We just have a few things to walk you through before we can officially give you the keys! We wouldn’t want to rush pell-mell into something as important as property , now would we?

Rules

• Pay. Your. Rent. On. Time. Utilities are included within.

[Aleph (Ishmael)]

roleplaying? time to go into a perfectionist spiral about my writing

[Aleph (Ishmael)]

i swear ill restart NFA again soon truss i just got inspired for a different writing project

[Geyde]

Sure

[Geyde]

Copy from an established idea, make alterations